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Saturday, May 17, 2014

Snippet Sunday and Weekend Writing Warriors.

Welcome to Sunday Snippet and Weekend Writing Warriors. My excerpt today is from my current WIP. I've skipped a little bit from where I left off last week.  'She' is Alex, Rhett's wife. Since the story is set in The Isle of Palms near Charleston, SC, I thought I'd share one of my favorite beach pictures with you. That's my granddaughter and grandson in the picture, and they aren't but a few miles from the Isle of Palms.

“Let’s go talk,” she said, reaching for his hand and leading him upstairs to the room they’d shared ever since their marriage.  She sat down on the pale yellow sofa in the window and patted the space beside her. “Sit down and tell me what’s wrong. You do look upset.”
He shrugged off his jacket and reached into the inside pocket. His fingers burned when they touched the picture. This was almost unbearable. How was flesh and blood supposed to endure it?


I do have some good news to share. My current release Blue 52 is a RomCon finalist in the Readers' Crown contest. If you'd like to read the first chapter of Blue 52 you can find it at http://elainepcantrell.blogspot.com/2013/12/release-party-blue-52.html


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20 comments:

Teresa Cypher said...

Nice pic--beach and family...they go together well!

One thing jumped out at me when I was reading your snippet. "She sat down..." followed by ""Sit down and..." Maybe vary the way you indicate sitting down? Perhaps, "She took a seat on the pale yellow sofa." ? Then follow through her telling him to sit down.

I like this story--and I really wonder what it is he has to tell her!! lol. You're such a story tease, Elaine.

Congrats on the RomCon Finalist for The Readers' Crown. Woot! Excellent book, Elaine, and I think it deserves the honor :-)

P.T.Wyant said...

I'm getting more and more intrigued by what he has to tell her...

Linda said...

I have a feeling she is not going to like seeing the picture in his hand either.

Good luck with the contest!

Jenna said...

Loved the description. I too don't think she's going to like what's in this picture. Nice 8.

Charmaine Gordon said...

Holding my breath waiting for the revelation. Good luck in the contest, Elaine.

Marcia said...

Great photo! Love the immediate sense of sheer joy there.

I agree with Teresa about the repetition of "sit". You could also leave out "sit down" from her dialog, or change it to "Join me and..." Love the suspense you've built up in the excerpt, Elaine.

Botanist said...

Good tension sustained through these snippets.

One thing I wondered as a writer, and given that I am seeing a segment of the story out of context, does the reader already know what the secret is by now? It makes a big difference to how this scene would come across depending on whether or not the reader is in the know.

Karysa Faire said...

Uh-oh. A picture? What could this be about?

Congratulations on the Rom-Con final-ing!

Elaine Cantrell said...

Thanks so much for your help. You're right.

Elaine Cantrell said...

I hope readers feel that way. Thanks.

Elaine Cantrell said...

No she won't. Thanks.

Elaine Cantrell said...

Thanks so much.

Elaine Cantrell said...

Thanks so much.

Elaine Cantrell said...

Yes I have to change that for sure. Thanks for stopping by.

Elaine Cantrell said...

Readers don 't know. They'll find out when Alex does.

Elaine Cantrell said...

Thank you so much.

homecomingbook said...

Y have me wondering what's in the picture.

Elaine Cantrell said...

Thanks to everyone who stopped by and thanks to those of you who helped me see things I had to fix. I thought I had figured out how to answer each comment personally, everything got tossed in a pile instead of their proper places. Sorry. :(

alexisduranblog.com said...

Grrrr…the suspense is killing me! Another great snippet.

Veronica Scott said...

Loved the photo, so carefree! I'm with everyone else (although late in stopping by, thanks to being at RT) - very intrigued by what the photo may be about. Can't wait for more, great 8!